Thursday, May 31, 2012

Help me write a better story for you!

Okay, so there are a few things I want to have happen in Lucky 13,  I have the ending all scripted out and a few other key scenes, but I need help getting there.  I don't want to rush their relationship, but also don't want to do a play-by-play of all of their dates.  Besides it's been nearly a decade since I've gone on an "early in the relationship" date and I hardly remember how they go.

So my question for you all - what do you want to see from James and Emma?

I can't promise to incorporate it all, but I'd love some direction.  I guess I'm just a little blocked right now and need some inspiration.  Help!

And THANKS!

23 comments:

  1. more intimate details about how his disability affects their relations.
    also a sex scene if you're feeling generous ;)

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  2. I want more scenes where James is showing the things he's really good at... and using his crutches too ;)

    Shout-out to anyone else who would like to see stuff in Swimming to the Surface, too -- still working on it but always open to suggestions!

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    1. I'm really interested in seeing him meet Jules' friends - especially the one who knows she's a dev.

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    2. I think that's the next few scenes -- that and her family!

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    5. (Sorry -- I think when I hit the "back" button when replying from my phone it likes to redo the "post" option. I'll try to avoid that next time...)

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    6. I would NOT like to read how Jeff learns about Jules being a dev and then backs off feeling hurt and not wanting to love her anymore. I just love to read anything they do feeling the deep affection between them. That's such a nice reading. But, if it's maybe possible, I would not mind at all to get an update on Mr. Ridenour and his lovely lady, that was indeed such a nice start (even though you meant it probably to be both a beginning and en end...).

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    7. Hey Anonymous -- I would very much like to discuss this with you further (really!), but this is probably not the best place for an extended chat. Could you either send me a PM on the Paradevo board or send me an email at janewheeler17 at yahoo?

      Short answer: I don't think he would flat-out not love her anymore, but I think it would be a shock to him. I do have a fair amount of the climactic part of the story written, but I'm open to suggestions on how I could do things better. But rest assured that even through the most difficult part, that feeling of affection would be strong -- and that would probably cause some angst itself!

      And yes, I feel guilty about leaving Chris and Lily stranded! I started something, but it wasn't really working.

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  3. I would love to hear more about James's past and the dates he went on prior to Emma. Sounds like he got burned a bunch of times.

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  4. I want James to paint a portrait of Emma, while she has no clothes on. Then I think they should have sex, also while she has no clothes on. For the sex, it would be convenient if James is also naked and you graphically describe his body for us.

    Just a thought, I love your story, it makes me hot hot hot.

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    1. I love this idea, it's also a great opportunity to see his standing frame again and get her reaction to it.

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  5. I would love to see more of his disability too, how he gets over The insecurity with his body and definetely a sex scene pleaaaase! Oh, it would be great to show a little more of him as an artist. But whatever you decide to do , just keep writing. This is a great story!

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  6. I keep thinking back to the time when James & Emma were walking to her car after the wedding, they were talking about his gait and crutch use... She wondered how they were going to hold hands. I would love to see a scene where they go for a walk without his crutches holding hands. I imagined that he would be very self conscious since he would really need her for balance, but as usual Emma would make him feel comfortable and assure him that all was fine and that she would happily hold his hand any time.

    You might be able to tell that I've been thinking of this scene a lot :)

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    1. I would love to read a scene like that

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  7. I would love an ex-bf or gf to show up further down the line. I would also love something unexpected. Most of these stories deal with rejection and the eventual acceptance of each others vulnerabilities. I don't want another wedding or engagement...argh. (Sorry!) Maybe some sort of different event? A concert, a funeral, maybe he has an art exhibition and an ex shows up? Or her family. Or maybe they take a trip somewhere exotic and deal with shizz there. Or maybe she meets Ben and fall for him? Haha! I don't know...it's a great story though! - Oh, i'd love to see him in a chair!!!

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  8. how about the CP is diagnosed to become worst, and they have to reconsider their relationship..? There might not be a wedding, but being happy and cherish the day for the moment is romantic enough for me... of course the sex scene with some spasms in between...

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  9. Does CP get worse (apart from normal aging process)? Ha, you can tell I'm not a CP dev as I don't know all the details! But I'm still loving the story and getting lots of devvy feelings from it! Anyway, I love the descriptions of how James moves and of his emotions so more of that would be great. How about they take a trip together?
    And I'm a sucker for a happy ending so can I put an order in for that?
    Well done so far. LOVE IT!!!

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    1. I completely second this!

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  10. Thanks you all so much! You've given me some good ideas, in fact I stayed up writing a bit last night and should have a new section posted by the weekend. I hope you all will be pleased.

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  11. What happened to this story? I'm looking for Lucky 13 and Swimming to the Surface. I see comments and references to new sections, but the links seems to be broken. :(

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    1. The authors chose to remove their stories from this site.

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