Tuesday, July 31, 2012

SttS: Oh my GOD, people.

So, um, you know how I said the last section had drama?

You ain't seen nothing yet.

You might want to go back and read Chapter 14 first, as I made a wee change at the end. But Chapter 15 is... well, it's kind of a doozy in every way possible.

You've been warned.

19 comments:

  1. It's wonderful, Jane. Congratulations and thanks for your work.
    Besides the excellent writing and the sensitivity handling the characters, I love your choice of 'showing' the main male character indirectly, through his actions and behavior, more than telling directly how he is and why. You do that (the 'telling') in this chapter (the brother's explanations) and I think it was the right time, a perfect climax. I think you've created a strong protagonist. And very wounded. Paradoxes...
    Don't keep us waiting for the next update. And keep writing, you do have a way with words and emotions.
    M

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    1. Thank you so much. It was very hard to write; I've had it in progress for more than a month now, and I wondered if it would get to be too much for a single section. But even though it's still very intense, I feel like it needed to happen.

      I owe a huge thanks to Eleanore, who has been an awesome writing partner.

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    2. Ah, shucks! Anytime. This is such a terrific section in an already wonderful story. It hurts, but I think the pay-off will be worth it.

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  2. Is it very mean to really like it? Knowing that things will turn around for good in the end, though ;-) It's a wonderful chapter, we learn a lot and yet stay curious and cannot wait for the next... Thanks for going on despite struggling!

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  3. Wow. Just wow. I've been reading your story and just haven't commented yet.... That was ah-maz-ing! The tension-- I could feel it while I read that exchange. You had me on the edge of my seat. I just hope Jules can see through that horrifically painful smokescreen....

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  4. I hope she can too - if she really loves him

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  5. Actually I don't think I could go back to him after that. He is really going to have to grovel to her. He is really going to have to cry to get her back.

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  6. You're a good writer but so are a lot of the women who write here. Do you have to consistently oversell your stories? It bugs the shit out of me. Every time you post, you act like we're so lucky to get an update and that this is the greatest thing we'll ever read. Nobody else does that, why must you?

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    1. I think that is a completely unnecessary comment. She's giving fair warning that this section is very dramatic - which it is. That's not "over-selling" that is just a fact.
      All the writers are welcome to promote their own sections as they please.

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    2. I agree 100% with Eleanore. Besides, this particular update was on the dramatic side; it's nice to have a warning. :)

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    3. Well, let's see.

      Because I have fun doing it?
      Because I'm a marketing writer, and I'm used to doing this?
      Because other people did stuff, so I thought I might as well?
      Because there have been giant postings surrounding my teaser posts, so I like to make them a little more memorable?

      I'd encourage the other writers to do whatever they feel like doing in their posts. This place is the Bob Ross of story blogs: this is our world, and if we want to put a happy little link next to a big ol' teaser, so be it.

      If you'd like to discuss anything else related to writing, please don't hesitate to email me at janewheeler17 at gmail dot com.

      Happy reading, and god bless, my friend.

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    4. After I posted that comment, I actually felt kind of bad about it and thought that I was being mean and shouldn't have written that. But I was unable to delete it. So instead I'll explain myself further.

      I really like this story, but the "selling" you do irritates me so much that I almost don't want to read it for that alone. Humility is a quality I value highly, so having "OH MY GOD, I JUST WROTE THE MOST DRAMATIC THING YOU'LL EVER READ" shoved in my face sort of ruins it for me. I was trying to ignore it until now, but this last post really got me.

      The story is good, and yes, this post was dramatic. And I'm sure I don't have the right to complain about getting all this great writing for free. But maybe you do care a little bit about the fact that you're turning off some of your readers. Or maybe not.

      I'm genuinely not trying to be mean or hurt your feelings. I would feel sad if you stopped writing this story. I just felt compelled to express myself because it's been bothering me for so long.

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    5. Duly noted, and thank you for your comment.

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  7. Anyway, it is all a bit of fun. It is not like she is trying to promote it for money. It is a nice story and she is pre-warning everyone that the story is getting exciting. I don't understand what the problem is.

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  8. I read Danielle's comment and thought I'd respond... then I thought, Jane's a big girl and seems very able to deal with stuff on her own, other people will surely comment and I don't want to be part of a dog pile on Danielle.

    But, after taking my shower and thinking some more... I do have something to say....

    I've been on this site a long time. I have seen fabulous times of deep writing on the message boards and times of absolute famine and times of war. In all the time I've been here (and I'll readily admit that I've not been here the longest) there's been a dearth of good fiction. We'd have one or two people writing at a time. So I am beyond thrilled at the stuff being produced by Jane, EJ, Eleanore, RyooT, Max, Aloha, Kelly, whoever's writing Daniel and whoever else I've missed. This stuff takes effort on their part. They're writing, for our enjoyment, when they could be doing other stuff. And so, if one of them wants to say, "Fuck you people, here's more shit for you to read!" before their updates then so be it. I'll not quibble. :-P

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  9. I am thrilled that everyone who is wonderful at writing has made so many superb contributions and shared them with us. I like the intros to the stories. Many times, if I am busy, I will check the site for any new updates, and the short promos for each story tell me what I can look forward to later -- when I can steal a moment to read. Thank you all, again, for the terrific stories!

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  10. Okay, I think I will go crazy if I have to wait anoher day for the next chapter!!! Pretty please.. an update soon would be great!
    tina

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  11. Please.. an update soon!!!.

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  12. I hate to burst your bubble, but Jules and Jeff are in a little bit of a timeout right now for their behavior. (Also, I just got out of three solid weeks of activity and am tiiiired!) Never fear, though; they'll be back before you know it.

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